Antigone Cadmus

Excellent. Short yet very good. I agree, the first line is a bit too short. Also, get a bit more into the suicide theme. If you hadn't mentioned it was ...

This is cute. I agree that it does need a better meter, but I like it. I drew a smiley on my knee, because life needed happier things. My knee ...

This is a great poem. Critique: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I walk this road, I walk this road. Alone in travels, travels. The light does not show,

Don't put our own work down! This is good! I've read bad poems, and this is not one. Good imagery, nice symbolism. I liked it because it wasn't silly and ...

This is short... Critique: Remove the ellipses. They are amateurish and corny (at least to me). The name slipped from him. Cyla seems like a pretty important kitty :). Both ...

This is very good! It is even better than the first chapter! Critique: She fell soon into what appeared to be a gran mal seizure, with every perfect detail but ...

I'm no poet, but I will review this. :) I think your an excellent writer. I've read your Elsa story. I enjoyed it more than your poetry. This isn't bad, ...

o.O. Well this is...short. But you tell the story in an interesting wat. Be brave and post more. You're grammar is fine. Maybe you could add a bit more description... ...

Chapter two We rode the bike at city speed limits. I passed blunt directions to Adam via the microphones in our helmets and ground my teeth over the bike’s slow ...

The first review nearly took the ideas out of my mouth. You have a good concept going. It isn't like everything else. However, the Death/afterlife cliches should be gotten rid ...

You definetly aren't a bad writer. However, it is my absolute pet-peeve when people write like Charles Dickens, so my critique might not be the nicest :) Before passing the ...

I swear I will critique this later, but right now this is waaay too long to do a review. From what I read it is pretty good, but when I ...

Okay, I'm just wondering if you're using real names here. You shouldn't use real names unless you've gotten those people's consent. If I was writing a non-fiction piece about my ...

This is a good start. Hope this critique is helpful! Eric threw a rock at her window the rain was pouring and he knew that her parents wouldn't let him ...

She has Tourettes? That's interesting. I've never read a book that had Tourette's in it. That's really original idea, Vox. You have Tourettes? Aww... *pats on head* vortex's eye of ...